You should know...

By Narcissa


You came bearing flowers
Replacing the reaper
With two blue irises
To see past death




You called upon walking giants
To storm across desolate plains
And fought a fortress of
Silent snipers




And yet still
I wonder
How did you get in here?




Hush now.
The natives are sleeping
And when they see their towers torn
And deprived of stone
It won't be just me alone






I will rebuild with your flame
In my heart
For your outstretched hand
Has been de.light.ful
But before I go
I must thank you




... Ill keep a part of me open now
and ill wait
till the world gives up
or we do....

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© 2008 Narcissa
Published on Sunday, June 8, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Tuesday, December 12, 2017, Cassette (1144)By person wrote:

    hush now.... oh, I will have to be hushed... nothing I can say to do this justice.

  • Ashteroth On Friday, October 1, 2010, Ashteroth (192)By person wrote:

    Enjoyable read this proved to be :) Thanks for posting ~Ash

  • thelostmessenger On Thursday, August 14, 2008, thelostmessenger (112)By person wrote:

    wow. htis is spoken beautifully. i love the last stanza and how its so finalizing. tragic.

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Tuesday, August 12, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (359)By person wrote:

    Back again... still love this

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Thursday, June 19, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (359)By person wrote:

    It's only been 11 days, but its already time for a reminder of how much I love this piece...

  • Sketso On Tuesday, June 10, 2008, Sketso (435)By person wrote:

    ... what can I say that hasn't already been spoken? consider me speechless ...

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, June 8, 2008, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    This is simply spot on, bang on, perfecto :) Clarity of heart rings and reins true with this poem. Brilliantly wrought.

  • Rebel tiGer King On Sunday, June 8, 2008, Rebel tiGer King (258)By person wrote:

    this my dear, sparks the flame of a muses heart -symph-

  • snakeskingrin On Sunday, June 8, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    I like the atmosphere this piece invokes...cool stuff.:)Snake

  • A former member wrote: *joins ppr in huggles* perfect once again

  • Withering petals On Sunday, June 8, 2008, Withering petals (68)By person wrote:

    deep and entrancing. Nice work ~Downstream~

  • A former member wrote: *huggles narcissa* i love it.

  • A former member wrote: An ancient portrayal of conditioned hearts ducking and weaving through thick and thin in order to bring a result, of which only will surfice if the heart is content with its efforts...Excellence.

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Sunday, June 8, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (359)By person wrote:

    You did it again... *faves* I don't even know how to describe it.

  • veingo On Sunday, June 8, 2008, veingo (532)By person wrote:

    Beautiful. ^V^


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