old oceans

By Six-Out

old oceans

silver platters weren't meant for words.
so I learned never to speak of wisdom in heartbeats.
because murmurs spit toe lines.
and I can't tap dance on whispered thoughts.
drinking in offbeat patterns to a tune of a peace.
when i can't drink from this tide-
for fear of the salt water hitting the cuts on my tongue.
from when I chose to speak of heartache in wisdom.
while my hands are rough. and I think of
when money can't buy back the sleepless nights.
and the days I've just wasted on
opening my eyes- but not living.

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Published on Friday, May 23, 2008. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "old oceans"

A former member wrote: this had a carpe diem sense to it.... looking back with an edge for the future.... I like the reversal, the wisdom in heartache... the heartbeat of the wise... I can hear that sound in these words.
A former member wrote: its the final statement/sentiment....wasted just opening my eyes and not living...that actually makes me feel ashamed and small. which mayhap i needed? gutting write without any glam....jsut pure truth. happy new year, six~
On Tuesday, August 19, 2008, Morbid_insanity (75) wrote:

this is really interesting cuase i feel like im here, like still opening m eyes, and keeping myself from living. this was nice :)
A former member wrote: WOW!!!! HAVE YOU EVEN DROVE BY A GHETTO?????LOLOLLOL
A former member wrote: Six...write on my heart one day, luv, would you? Make it beautiful.
On Sunday, June 15, 2008, Anth (1133) wrote:

i know i like a poem, when i think of it on days my mind is clear of all thoughts, the ending of this especially, memorable, and meaning a lot to me
On Friday, June 13, 2008, urbanhumility (1175) wrote:

profound and so very cold.........you have spoken well my friend..........urban
On Wednesday, June 11, 2008, palenoble (47) wrote:

thanks
On Tuesday, June 3, 2008, Jonas (720) wrote:

the lines that brought together sleepless nights and days wasted hit home rather poignantly... your writing just gets better and better fellow wordsmith.
On Thursday, May 29, 2008, veingo (533) wrote:

See, this is why I never leave you coments. What the hell could I say to this??? Bold lines, so well layed out. "The Salt water hitting the cuts in my tongue" I wish that was my line. ^V^
On Monday, May 26, 2008, TropicalSnowstorm (1703) wrote:

"can't tap dance on whispered thoughts" - very cool image! Ciao, Steve
On Friday, May 23, 2008, Fantecstasy (122) wrote:

You took what I've been looking for, for a long while, and wrote it here. I don't know what else to say. *tips hat*
On Friday, May 23, 2008, Rebel tiGer King (258) wrote:

this made me think, maybe inspired by all that overtime and realizing how little we live even though we are alive, well done brother -symph-
On Friday, May 23, 2008, NikesRain (1298) wrote:

i clicked without looking who this was by but somehow within the first lines i knew it was you... and as always the lines are effective and run themselves deep with what they create emotionally and mentally... *hugs*
On Friday, May 23, 2008, Sparrow (89) wrote:

*sighs*

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