wishful drinking.

By Six-Out



lips like dominance.
and I can slide ice cubes down
my throat. in hopes that wishes aren't meant
for stars.

because my fingers are on fire for answers
in the way that words are as heavy
as the feathers we train them to fly with.
when you make a mockery of indecision.
it's easier to breathe in off beat odors-
than take pain at face value.

so. in retrospect- maybe it wasn't so smart
to throw the glass at the wall. but the shatter felt so powerful
I could feel the fragments of hope lingering in the smell
and the way the pieces hypnotize.

I feel numb.

and the stars are starting to blur.
and they're falling.
                           falling.
                                     falling.


I feel numb.
so perfectly numb.

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© 2008 Jon Rodgers
Published on Tuesday, May 6, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Devilish On Thursday, May 5, 2011, Devilish (3797)By person wrote:

    Fuck yeah!!! Bravo! Feed me... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: it amazes me how you can combine raw emotion and metaphor with such balance and still allow the poem to continue into the reader's mind.... this doesn't end... it moves off the screen... the second tier of poetry..... the tropological movement in the mind of the reader. *bows pensively* Scholar

  • A former member wrote: It's like I've gone down with you Scholar

  • Mars On Sunday, April 5, 2009, Mars (337)By person wrote:

    I like this. Love the fingertips, but I don't like you feeling numb. Scholar

  • Cherry Bear On Thursday, January 22, 2009, Cherry Bear (27)By person wrote:

    Wow Six-out this is really amazing like it a lot. ST~

  • Morbid_insanity On Monday, July 21, 2008, Morbid_insanity (76)By person wrote:

    you have like a true mastery of words. it like left me in awe. this is definitely the shit -josh

  • demonofthefall On Wednesday, July 2, 2008, demonofthefall (23)By person wrote:

    can see why youd be royalty with this number, nice work

  • Jonas On Wednesday, June 18, 2008, Jonas (768)By person wrote:

    first: it is a wonderful picture on your home page. second: this poem is wound tight with not a word wasted the tension jumping off the tongue.

  • DarkPoet On Tuesday, June 17, 2008, DarkPoet (247)By person wrote:

    Here I was expecting some sort of Hank Williams number. Scholar

  • AdrianJ On Monday, May 26, 2008, AdrianJ (34)By person wrote:

    Very vivid imagery. I think that anyone who has taken up drinking to drown out the pain that is life can relate to this. I certainly do and I've drowned a lot of sorrows in a lot of bottles - but they always resurface but for that moment they drown...

  • CorruptedLittleGirl On Thursday, May 22, 2008, CorruptedLittleGirl (260)By person wrote:

    Sad and beautiful.

  • Mahakala On Tuesday, May 20, 2008, Mahakala (209)By person wrote:

    and heaven slowly crumbles...

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, May 17, 2008, carlosjackal (2470)By person wrote:

    Alcohol escape in solidarity. This was wrought brilliant.

  • Lotophagi On Thursday, May 15, 2008, Lotophagi (341)By person wrote:

    I.feel.hollow. but this brings tears to my eyes. potent wording. wonderful.

  • Anoblechicken On Wednesday, May 7, 2008, Anoblechicken (38)By person wrote:

    i feel numb???? numb is not a feeling is it or maybe it is hmmmmm ill ponder this for a while

  • A former member wrote: like finding a tranquil inner, when everything on the outer is so splintered, great write.

  • Sketso On Wednesday, May 7, 2008, Sketso (456)By person wrote:

    '...not so smart...felt so powerful' - that whole section blew me away as the image/scene rolled through my mind. Wish I could find that numbness sometimes...

  • A former member wrote: its all in the second strophe; the way you set a tone, a mood, a dream . . . ..amazing is no small thing. nessa

  • Rebel tiGer King On Tuesday, May 6, 2008, Rebel tiGer King (274)By person wrote:

    nice *cheers* drunk on a school night jon? lucky! but i like the piece brother -symph-

  • Distorted_Reality On Tuesday, May 6, 2008, Distorted_Reality (104)By person wrote:

    well I prefer wishful smoking... so I can have a happy liver and sad lungs and you can have happy lungs and an unhappy liver...*shrugs and zones for a little* well I just figured I'd comment to say I really like this...especially the way you ended it...*dreads your curly hair and goes back to smoking* peace mexican texan.

  • Aleas On Tuesday, May 6, 2008, Aleas (180)By person wrote:

    Fallen upon another good poet. I can see this as I read it. My favorite kind of poem.

  • Sparrow On Tuesday, May 6, 2008, Sparrow (92)By person wrote:

    *raises bottle with shifty eyes*

  • GoldenLotus On Tuesday, May 6, 2008, GoldenLotus (47)By person wrote:

    cheers.


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