The Scene

By colorapathy

The scene, it lights the stage anew.
Applause ascends velvet from view.
The stage appears, coalesced in night.
A beam, as moth confused in flight,
sets pale. Its wings, still spread, unveil.
A hint unfolds as to its tale.
The light consumes the moth beneath.
A spell, unfurled, its charm bequeathed.
Applause denotes its span of life.
The darkness falls as though by knife.
The stage sets bare with hopeful breath,
and waits for dusk, the stages’ requite.
Return pale moth, again alight.
Once more, sad tale, reborn, takes flight.

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© 2008 colorapathy
Published on Friday, May 2, 2008.     Filed under: "Structured" and "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, May 28, 2008, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    Congratulations! Looks like I voted for the eventual winner..Yay! Cracking judgement =) -Carl

  • Moonflower On Sunday, May 25, 2008, Moonflower (301)By person wrote:

    this is just so beautiful *_*

  • The Lipstick Factor On Saturday, May 24, 2008, The Lipstick Factor (290)By person wrote:

    *applauds*....well deserved!

  • A former member wrote: I'd love to scansion this more, but the iambs are unmistakable in places... may have a couple trochees here or there and even a couple spondaic feet in "sad tale" and "again", I think... but I can only imagine the difficulty in writing measured verse... and with notable imagery, too! kudos and congrats!

  • A former member wrote: Congratulations on the win with an excellent, rhythmic piece with such divine imagery. I could quote several, but my favorite by far is "The darkness falls as though by knife." This had such a timeless, classic baroque feeling to it. Well done, indeed.

  • colorapathy On Friday, May 23, 2008, colorapathy (50)By person wrote:

    THank you very much! The flambe was a fun challenge.

  • A former member wrote: beautiful images you've brought to life. well done.

  • colorapathy On Friday, May 23, 2008, colorapathy (50)By person wrote:

    Thank you!

  • RubyXero On Tuesday, May 20, 2008, RubyXero (484)By person wrote:

    beautifully written. lovely images.

  • colorapathy On Friday, May 23, 2008, colorapathy (50)By person wrote:

    Thank you

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, May 17, 2008, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    Classical poetics with a wonderful story and poignant images and set up. Very well done :) -Carl

  • colorapathy On Friday, May 23, 2008, colorapathy (50)By person wrote:

    THank you very much!

  • The Lipstick Factor On Friday, May 2, 2008, The Lipstick Factor (290)By person wrote:

    lovely....just lovely, and what the monkey said...*points down*

  • colorapathy On Friday, May 23, 2008, colorapathy (50)By person wrote:

    Thank you! I really appreciate a comment from someone that I respect as a poet so much!

  • Dancing_Monkey On Friday, May 2, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    By something holy yes. I want to listen to this spoken. good write

  • colorapathy On Friday, May 23, 2008, colorapathy (50)By person wrote:

    I would love to speak it for people some time. I enjoy poetry readings as well as writing it. Thank you for the comment!

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