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Can i be your Juliet?
By BethanyBallet
Can i be your juliet?
Those were her first words
as she sighed upon his blue eyes..
she filled her lungs with the summer daisy breeze
she felt like a wingless butterfly
I must be dreaming... She thought as he touched her hand with the slightest
stutter
His hands were as light as almost nothing
and she had never been this happy before.
Can i be your Juliet?
She stuttered in her mind
almost as unconcious as the first time
she was trying to sit still without looking clumsy
She kept thinking "Perfect" thoughts
I must be "Perfect" or he shall never deserve me..
This time.. I will be the Juliet in my ever-after..
She was still silent as could be
as thoughts of "Perfectness" ran through her mind
be perfect
act perfect
think perfect
I am "Perfect"
But that wasn't enough...
He saw her brown eyes..
He saw her Two-Toned Hair
He saw the Past on her face..
He saw the Hurt in Her Eyes
When he left her..
She was no longer perfect..
But only Perfect in that MeSsEd up Sortt of WaY.
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© 2008 BethanyBallet
Published on Thursday, April 3, 2008.
Filed under: "Philosophical" and
"Short Story"
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On Saturday, December 1, 2018, Jonas Robinson
(867)
wrote:
Witty and romantic. :)
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On Tuesday, November 11, 2008, allenthepope
(7) wrote:
incredible!...I'm so proud... I love you girl
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A former member wrote:
Perfect...YOU are a "Prize" that no one deserves to hold....YOU are a "Prize" a few will understand but many will desire to obtain. YOU are Perfectly Imperfect as stated...and very much a "Prize" to behold.
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On Thursday, May 1, 2008, Army Barbie
(324) wrote:
Very well written for such a young girl. Impressive. I agree with Rebel about the caps though.
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On Thursday, April 17, 2008, freudian-slip
(239) wrote:
so much talent here. terribly romantic and yet still very matter of fact. hmmmmmmmmmn:)
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On Thursday, April 17, 2008, Rebel_not_Radical
(78) wrote:
You're a very promising writer, being 14 and all...you have a natural talent for expressing your feelings and writing in a lyrical and solemn sort of way...i like the rhythm and the feel...although the poem could've worked without the sticky caps in the end...cool write though...welcome to DP
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On Friday, April 4, 2008, brokenbandagedbetter
(29) wrote:
Always be true to yourself Beth, Never ever try to become of conform for any one missy! You are perfectly imperfect just as you are and I love you all the more for your individuality and your fearlessness...what is it that you always say? The ones that mind dont matter and the ones that matter dont mind!!!
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A former member wrote:
i like this poem it really reminds me of me and one of my friends i want to be his juliet but all he sees in my inperfections
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On Friday, April 4, 2008, denver nitze
(256) wrote:
i've asked that question so many times... this was yet another beautiful write. i'm glad you chose dp to post your works. i'm enjoying every one of them more and more. ~ta~
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A former member wrote:
a snippet of your novel perhaps, it felt like a short piece of a long story, I liked it.
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On Thursday, April 3, 2008, Fantecstasy
(122) wrote:
very interesting... and excellently done. *tips hat*
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On Thursday, April 3, 2008, Rebel tiGer King
(258) wrote:
good flow, i enjoy this piece because of the tone miss wonderland speaks of, very nice -symph-
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A former member wrote:
Gorgeous, luscious imagery, and lulling tone. Poetry like this has a pulse. Thank you so much for sharing. Welcome to DarkPoetry.
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