Quiet Storm

By GraveFlower

i can feel you breath softly on my neck

your warm arms around me, carressing me

whispering to me how much you care




then,

darkness falls

and the light corrupts the sky

by vomiting impurity

revealing trees and grasses



as the sun smoothly drowns behind the mountains

the darkness comforts you and takes you into your dreams again






only this time you scream,

and the sun doesnt come to save you





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Published on Tuesday, March 4, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, May 14, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    "only this time you scream, and the sun doesnt come to save you" - this is a great piece! I like how it starts light and ends dark. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Star On Friday, October 26, 2012, Star (920)By person wrote:

    oh wow.. this is beautiful in a way.. i defiantly loved this.. well done flower (:

  • A former member wrote: Wow, I can relate to this so insanely. It really tugged at my heart.

  • A former member wrote: In aw of this. So many great lines and a buttload of viscous imagery. Lovely girl... so lovely. =)

  • lupus tenebrae On Thursday, May 20, 2010, lupus tenebrae (872)By person wrote:

    Wow is definitely right, wherever there is light, there is darkness to drown it, well done, a very breathtaking read. Scholar

  • Dilated View On Thursday, May 20, 2010, Dilated View (583)By person wrote:

    Horrifying, sounds very lonely. Those last few lines were haunting, enjoyed the visuals you used throughout.

  • Gray Vision On Thursday, May 20, 2010, Gray Vision (425)By person wrote:

    Oh wow, now I see what all the talk is about, this poem shows the duration of many things ingeneral, a balace between night and day in a sence. Great write GF =)

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, December 2, 2009, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    "the sun doesnt come to save you" - nice! Scholar

  • Sketso On Monday, March 10, 2008, Sketso (436)By person wrote:

    'vomiting impurity' - powerful line.

  • denver nitze On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, denver nitze (256)By person wrote:

    and yet another wonderful piece from a wonderful girl. very nice write. ~ta

  • Dancing_Monkey On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    Preaty good indeed. I liked the line vomiting impurity revealing trees and grasses the best

  • whisperer On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, whisperer (166)By person wrote:

    *is in awe*

  • GraveFlower On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, GraveFlower (249)By person wrote:

    ........this helps prove that true love it thousands of miles away

  • whisperer On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, whisperer (166)By person wrote:

    had to read it again AWSOME!

  • whisperer On Tuesday, March 4, 2008, whisperer (166)By person wrote:

    i love this....it speaks to me like its my own epitaph....im faving it

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