smoking poetry paper like cheap cigars.

By Six-Out






I
am
falling
apart.


and I can't seem to fit words into the cracks
like so many times before. maybe I've been glued
by metaphor so many times. that
the descent.
broke me. beyond repair.

or maybe.
I'm just slowly working my way
into reality. and it's a place I never wanted
to visit to begin with.

and it hurts.

that's it. it hurts.
so I write. and I throw it away.
in hopes that everything.
that I felt when I wrote it. would go
with it. but then when the pen stops moving.
I'm left. with paper
riddled with dead stars in the form
of black.ink.words.

in short. the writing doesn't help.
and I'm here. needing sleep.
two cigarettes short of finishing a pack.

and. I give up.

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© 2008 Jon Rodgers
Published on Monday, January 7, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • 10 Forty Three On Friday, September 4, 2015, 10 Forty Three (674)By person wrote:

    That was brilliant!

  • Devilish On Wednesday, September 14, 2011, Devilish (3799)By person wrote:

    Oh how I know the feeling!!! Two cigarettes short of finishing a pack! Hell yeah! and i give up... Lovely! Scholar

  • Beautiful Incidental On Wednesday, September 14, 2011, Beautiful Incidental (42)By person wrote:

    ah yes.... the words and the cigarettes. ironic, isn't it?

  • A former member wrote: wow. the depth of this poem just screams from the screen. the emotion is mind blasting. write on... and on and on and on. :)

  • technicolour-girl On Saturday, January 17, 2009, technicolour-girl (22)By person wrote:

    what a phenomenal write

  • disposable On Tuesday, October 14, 2008, disposable (107)By person wrote:

    adore the still lonelieness of this. id say more but i dont think i can do it justice. write on...

  • Morbid_insanity On Tuesday, August 19, 2008, Morbid_insanity (76)By person wrote:

    i wish i could express to you how awesome you are. like the way you right capture the emotions i wish i could write.

  • A former member wrote: perfection can only be descovered by the unperfect. beautiful.

  • AniDayz On Wednesday, February 20, 2008, AniDayz (822)By person wrote:

    your intoxifying fingers wrap themselves around my flesh yet again...

  • italianbella On Tuesday, February 5, 2008, italianbella (188)By person wrote:

    you have such an amazing way with words this as amazing

  • totaltrip On Friday, January 25, 2008, totaltrip (36)By person wrote:

    most definitely wow-inducing!

  • Niemand On Tuesday, January 22, 2008, Niemand (368)By person wrote:

    *sighs* Just plain brilliant-ness...-Gin

  • Reefer_rave On Monday, March 31, 2008, Reefer_rave (146)By person wrote:

    agreed

  • Narcissa On Thursday, January 17, 2008, Narcissa (405)By person wrote:

    Damn!

  • A former member wrote: I have been feeling this same way for a long, long time. I just haven't found a way to say it yet, although I don't smoke, I found myself suddenly wanting to the other day. Thank you for speaking somewhat for me. It's good. Really good.

  • Bella Butchery On Thursday, January 10, 2008, Bella Butchery (734)By person wrote:

    doin it again

  • Six-Out On Thursday, January 10, 2008, Six-Out (1483)By person wrote:

    and what would that be?

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, January 15, 2008, Bella Butchery (734)By person wrote:

    making my writes feel shallow... you have a certain way of empathizing your pieces... wonderfull

  • Dei On Wednesday, January 9, 2008, Dei (708)By person wrote:

    Sweet Jon, It isnt in your nature to just give up. No matter how much you want to

  • Army Barbie On Tuesday, January 8, 2008, Army Barbie (324)By person wrote:

    You are what keeps me coming back to dp.

  • sIo On Tuesday, January 8, 2008, sIo (888)By person wrote:

    wait until the ink clogs up, the paper crumbles, and yours hands cramp up....your mind is jumbled, and your lips are dry....your eyes blink over and you've nothing to write.

  • glasshouse On Monday, January 7, 2008, glasshouse (568)By person wrote:

    Wow indeed. How excruciatingly painful to read. But, in your usual idiom, pain written like beauty and not like torture. Well done. Very sad to read. Damn. --Jes

  • Alanarchy On Monday, January 7, 2008, Alanarchy (1123)By person wrote:

    Jon.

  • Anth On Monday, January 7, 2008, Anth (1142)By person wrote:

    theres no need for long comments with you, its up there, i read it, its truly brilliant.

  • What Limes On Monday, January 7, 2008, What Limes (64)By person wrote:

    wow

  • Dysphoria On Monday, January 7, 2008, Dysphoria (88)By person wrote:

    This blew me away, you're words are fucking amazing. I don't think there is a word to describe how I feel about this. It's beautiful and it moves me in a way that almost makes me want to cry. This is definatly going on my favorites. -Justina

  • A former member wrote: It's simple, clear and emphatic. the placement of the punctuation makes the tone of the words come through that much more clearly. this is really good. nothing wasted, everything in its right place. I like it!


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