Please, o Please
By Adam
I started a new English class today and the teacher held up a tennis ball
and told us to write about the ball, she also mentioned that she bought
it for her dog... it actually said "pet shop" on the other side it. so
this is what i wrote, no edits, we had 8 min.
As I sit Wagging my tail
Just thinking about it makes me wail
Yellow, White, Full of fun
Makes me want to go for a run
Panting, chasing, bring it back
God I hope my owner buys a pack!
Racket, net, over a wall
Please, o Please just gimme the ball!
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© 2007 Adaml
Published on Wednesday, November 28, 2007.
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A former member wrote:
(-insert cheeky smile-) Lovely and short, straight to the point with a time constraint. I liked this. It was very nicely done.
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A former member wrote:
This is very good. When I read your intro, I thought of how I would write it, and I placed myself into the position of the tennis ball. So when I read the story from the canine point of view I was a bit tickled! Nice work...
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A former member wrote:
Hey, 8 minutes and 8 lines... Not at all bad.. -Short&Sweet- poem.. :)
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On Tuesday, September 9, 2008, Scarrzz
(238) wrote:
I'm impressed... or is it regressed? I get those mixed up.
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On Tuesday, September 9, 2008, Adam
(245) wrote:
Thanks, it was a quick assignment and I was the only one that did something creative compared to writing about how yellow the f-ing thing was, so I was proud :)
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On Saturday, December 22, 2007, italianbella
(185) wrote:
that was a very cute litle poem catchy...:)
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On Sunday, December 2, 2007, Sparrow
(89) wrote:
Cool, nice little poem, every dog's dream, a nice bouncy ball...-Cali
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On Friday, November 30, 2007, unspeakable truth
(100) wrote:
Put a smile on my face...
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On Thursday, November 29, 2007, SilentStalker
(1067) wrote:
...this should be dedicated to Max...
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On Thursday, December 6, 2007, Adam
(245) wrote:
Max does not read my stuff. :( but hey i know one of his... um... friends do, right Jo.
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On Sunday, June 1, 2008, Velvet_Raventon
(447) wrote:
So it's dedicated to me then? :)
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On Sunday, June 1, 2008, SilentStalker
(1067) wrote:
...if the hairier half got unlazy and signed in for him more often, I'm sure he Would read Adam's stuff...
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On Monday, June 2, 2008, Velvet_Raventon
(447) wrote:
Looking at the floor, one would say I am the hairier half :D (I swear I vacuum, but it's hard to keep up sometimes).
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On Thursday, June 19, 2008, SilentStalker
(1067) wrote:
...stop it, you're starting to scare me...
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A former member wrote:
Bad dog. No cookie. No ball. Go sit on the mat.
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A former member wrote:
this is sweet! you deserve a cookie ;)
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A former member wrote:
haha..yeah. it's cute :)
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On Thursday, November 29, 2007, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
hahaha, for 8 minutes i think it's outstanding and definitely gets its point across... nicely done
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On Thursday, November 29, 2007, Sketso
(436) wrote:
HAR! I can see those words running through my wee jack russel's mind now, followed by a "THROW THE DAMN BALL! MAN! THROW THE DAMN BALL!"
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On Thursday, November 29, 2007, Distorted_Reality
(101) wrote:
haha well not bad for the topic, and only having 8 min...nice ^_^