up and adam

By swing_the_hammer

i got an able body
able to fall, able to break
and i can walk a mile
down this road but
i start shaking
the weather just came in, it said
a hard rain's gonna fall
well i have seen a storm or two
yeah they come when i call

my woman's got a body, too
better than mine, though full of pain
but she seems to be a bit more able than me
able to bear, abel to cain
and it's hard to explain how the jealousy
of one can take away the other
it used to be just us, you see
now i've got to tell mother
how two plus two makes only three

so i used my own two feet
to flee this godforsaken garden
i had only the choice to leave
for there will be
no royal pardon
i have seen a thousand serpents since
each of them like you, or me
but didn't you hear about that apple?
it never falls far
from the tree

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© 2007 swing_the_hammer
Published on Tuesday, November 27, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • lovechild On Monday, April 30, 2012, lovechild (43)By person wrote:

    This rocks! I am pleased to have come across your works by chance, only because a soldier I know named Jack Hammer, the hammer swings. I love it.

  • A former member wrote: mind bendingly allegorical; the nunaces are every where and so delicately intelligent. conceptually, so original, as in original sinful good. ..articulately constructed and superb ending; resonant. without any recalitrance. .. .

  • A former member wrote: love the references -the structure, flow and mostly the concept behind this. Really excellent write. 'able to bear. abel to cain' -amazing line.

  • RubyXero On Wednesday, November 28, 2007, RubyXero (484)By person wrote:

    this whole structure and use of words was amazing. and i loved the ending with 'the apple doesn't fall far from the tree'... that was great.

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, November 27, 2007, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    your mind is precious. I fucking love this. The play on the idea, everything. So great.

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, November 27, 2007, Bella Butchery (724)By person wrote:

    i wish i can escape my mindset so i can write something like this... i dig your originallity

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