the rain is thinking of you today.

By Lynaes

hush.

the rain is thinking of you today.

distorting the milk of morning twilight
as it pours the blue discharge
across dirty mint green carpet
up stale bedsheets
creating halos around
the moles on your back.

and I drift through life
a petrol bomb thrown
in slow motion
a galaxy of umbers following me
to break the greasy surface
of the ocean...

abandoned cars bleed rainbows of bile
that seep into the gutters
lined with sick.
wooden gates moan in the wind
like moss-laced mothers
cradling their dying sons.

I always came back
following the trail of gravel moths
my steps would leave in your wake
flicking the debris of their wings
into my eyes...
spelling out words across my pupils

"stay... come back... don't go..."

blinded.
frantically crashing into train windows.

all these things never said...

filthy words etched
in public bathroom stalls.


his bones crack
like sour porcelain
as he lifts a cheap cigarette to his lips
the dried spit at the corner of his mouth
crumbles
like his yellowed
unbrushed teeth.
you'd swear he'd been chewing
on dead canaries
singing rancid whiskey songs
of old, pock marked widowers.

in my sleep
scratching hooks out of my skin


murmuring...

no...

no.


I often awoke from dreams
of being buried
with sand still filling my mouth and lungs
my hands like shrivelled carnations
with neon blue blood
trickling.
tricking down the tremoring window panes...


the chair he sits in
whimpers like a broken woman
at the first movement he's made
in hours.
the light from the High Definition T.V set
stains the cigarette smoke
blood red... forget-me-not blue...
a carnival of fucked up souls
as it curls around his nose
cluttered with black spots.

he sits alone.

staring.

sand softly spilling out
onto the ketchup stained couch..


my heart chants most nights.
seeping bitter words to him
like an infected wound
pouring onto delicately exposed tissue;

stopbreathing.

stopbreathing.

stopBREATHING.



...hush.

the rain has you in mind.
as it tenderly distorts the view from your window.

yes. the rain is thinking of you today...



but I am not.

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© 2007 Kim Christina Hughes
Published on Friday, October 26, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • OLd SouL On Wednesday, May 2, 2012, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    I don't know how you do what you do. Your words are always soft in my head, but they're brutal in context... I feel like a cocked-head puppy trying to fully comprehend what you're going through and trying to understand you. You'll have to forgive me and accept my loyalty and unconditional love.

  • Ladyhawke On Friday, July 8, 2011, Ladyhawke (394)By person wrote:

    . . . .Im speechless. . . .

  • Kaleidoscope_Heart On Thursday, July 22, 2010, Kaleidoscope_Heart (111)By person wrote:

    I come and go on DP in phases. Whenever i do, I always read your work. You are AMAZING. Your talent is inspiring. And this poem itself... all I can say is I feel and see and understand...and yet I still wonder... like with everything you write. All I have to say is.... if you magically posted again, I would be thrilled. ;)

  • Nixx On Thursday, December 27, 2007, Nixx (240)By person wrote:

    wow (stares in wonder for a moment) intense and descriptive, more please

  • Sketso On Monday, December 10, 2007, Sketso (436)By person wrote:

    Just now came across this one... gripping. And a sucker punch, in the end, that really isn't. Nicely done.

  • blue On Saturday, November 3, 2007, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    blue discharge o.O)) ninjagiggle.

  • Lynaes On Saturday, November 3, 2007, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    *ninja punch* HI YAH

  • blue On Saturday, November 3, 2007, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    okok! you rock you rock lady! owww. ninja lesson one.. dont upset the meeses. o.O))

  • Lynaes On Saturday, November 3, 2007, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    you knows it. ;)

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, November 4, 2007, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    serious!

  • A former member wrote: "abandoned cars bleed rainbows of bile that seep into the gutters lined with sick." Raw & absolutely wonderful; the imagery is fantastic. I could feel, taste, touch, hear every texture, sucked into each depth you've illustrated. And the images seemingly out of nowhere, almost misplaced yet perfect, unexpected: "filthy words etched in public bathroom stalls." The distortion of the rain's views, and the sudden, gripping ending. Heart-wrenching! "..." I feel as if I've just watched a Hitchcock inspired film noir. This is epic. 10+.

  • serotonin lost On Wednesday, October 31, 2007, serotonin lost (145)By person wrote:

    wow... i'm sorry but i cant think of anything better to say and any attempt would just make me look like a fool. wow...

  • Alanarchy On Tuesday, October 30, 2007, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    Your work is always visible, and vivid. I can dig it, kimsies.

  • Solace On Monday, October 29, 2007, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    Normally, I've lots to say, but sometimes you beggar me of my emotions - as this piece does. It drains it like a mantra, draws you in and tears little pieces of the soul. Ainsof, bleeds my own words as aptly as I could say them...

  • A former member wrote: such an evocative intrusion... a beastly soul aptly described intruding upon the whispers of beauty softly pelting, as if seeking a way to cleanse the earth of a pusillanimous stench that hooks and bleeds out life... a leech, a parasite, a slug to which the rain might offer a pinch of salt to end the suffering. I feel the degradation and decay.

  • Bella Butchery On Monday, October 29, 2007, Bella Butchery (724)By person wrote:

    your talent keeps hearts beating.. what ever keeps you writing, keep it up. this gets faved, because i feel this piece with pure empathy. amazing

  • Fantecstasy On Sunday, October 28, 2007, Fantecstasy (122)By person wrote:

    Very nice... loved the images it brought to me... [Yes I do enjoy sick images sometimes]

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, October 28, 2007, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    Heavy, beautiful piece =) And a new one..Yay!!! Keep 'em coming Platinum Lady :) -Golden Gentlemen

  • Narcissa On Sunday, October 28, 2007, Narcissa (404)By person wrote:

    what a hypnotic piece - I couldn't take my eyes off it - then I had to read it again. Excellent

  • Six-Out On Saturday, October 27, 2007, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    I had to comment on this. To say how good it was. I've got goosebumps from that ending.

  • Anth On Friday, October 26, 2007, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    this was breathtakingly good kim, my heart was stopped all way through and that ending is just sublime, truly well thought and so many great ideas and lines and creativity in this, trademark lynaes, this was modern beautiful brilliance

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